Understanding the Effort
Thumbs up for the effort, and it is amazing what you've done, but no blue writing, that is so hard to read my eyes pop out. Text should be the simplest thing to do, so just make sure it's easy to read. Add a bit of design to the look. I know it's a cartoon, and no one really thinks about design when it comes to animation, but you are doing it in flash so beef it up a bit, make it look good, it's a half an hour job tops.
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